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b) A childlike creature dressed in muddy rags is rudely awakened from her sleep by what appears to be an inquisitive leprechaun prodding her with an oak twig.
- Stop doing that! Ann said and turned her back to the figure standing beside her.
- Please, miss Ann, you need to wake up now, the leprechaun said with a squeky voice.
- Leave me alone, can´t you see I´m sleeping.
- But miss Ann, I need to tell you something important.
- Oh, alright then, Ann said with a groan and threw of her blanket and turned towards the little man.
- And what is it that is so important that you have to wake me up during my afternoon nap?, she said, and gave the leprechaun a stern look.
- I´m really sorry to wake you, but as I said, it is important.
- Yes?
- Let me introduce myself, my name is Patrick and I was sent here to tell you that your friend, Talia the elf, needs your help.
- What? Has something happened? Is she alright?
- She wouldn´t tell me, the leprechaun said with a sigh at her reaction. She just told me to come and tell you to come to the old oak tree by the lake and that she will be waiting there for you.
- Are you sure she meant right now? It doesn´t sound like it was that urgent, can´t I finish my nap first?
- She said to tell you to come as quickly as you can, so I don´t think so.
- Ok, ok. I get the message, Ann said and reluctantly got up.
- Are you sure that she meant this oak tree? Ann said doubtingly to the leprechaun as they arrived at the clearing which seemed to be deserted.
- Yes, yes. I´m sure, Patrick said impatiently. Maybe she´s waiting on the other side? He gestured Ann forward and she stepped around the big oak tree.
- Surprise!, a mix of voices yelled as soon as she came around the tree.
- What is this? she asked.
- It is your birthday party, silly, a voice said and Ann´s friend Talia stepped forward and gave her a hug.
- But I told you I didn´t want a party Talia, said Ann in a whiny tone.
- Oh I know, but I wanted you to have one. Everyone should celebrate their birthday, even you Ann, Talia said and smiled at Ann.
- And you!, Ann turned towards Patrick the leprechaun. You tricked me!
- No I didn´t, he said and smiled. I just told you what you needed to know and nothing else. That is not lying.
- Ok, I´ll give you that, but I will not trust you again.
- Fair enough, he shrugged his shoulders.
- But now, if you all would excuse me, I think I want a piece of my birthday cake now, Ann said, and with a smile she turned towards the big cake waiting for her by the old oak tree.
Hi Sophie,
SvaraRaderaNice piece, i really liked the interaction between the characters in your text. The spelling and the grammar was flawless as far as i can see.
Cheers
/Stefan